Some people think that building tall building is the best way to create more housing space, while other people believe it's better to build many houses on land. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many societies believe that building a high building is the best measure to provide more space for housing, others think that it is better to construct the
house
on Use synonyms
land
/ground. In my opinion, for limited areas with dense Use synonyms
population
, Fix the agreement mistake
populations
multi storey
apartment is the best model of public housing, Add a hyphen
multi-storey
while
for sites with less populated, building Linking Words
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house
on spacious Fix the agreement mistake
houses
land
could be more favorable.
High building is the best solution to accommodate housing for citizens in urban Use synonyms
Use synonyms
area
. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Such
a property has Linking Words
structure
requiring less footprint compared to Correct article usage
a structure
grounded
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a grounded
the grounded
house
. Use synonyms
For example
, many landed Linking Words
houses
in Jakarta City have been replaced by apartments which can accommodate more living Use synonyms
houses
for families. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the remaining space around the building can be converted to Linking Words
the
public amenities, Correct article usage
apply
such
as green parks, playgrounds or Linking Words
sport
venues. Change the noun form
sports
In addition
, Linking Words
city
view or city light from the height of Correct article usage
the city
residence
might be entertaining for certain people. Correct article usage
the residence
However
, apartment construction Linking Words
demand
huge expenses related to Change the verb form
demands
complexity
of the engineering design.
Meanwhile, constructing Add an article
the complexity
Use synonyms
house
on Add an article
a house
the house
land
is less complicated and cheaper than Use synonyms
high
skyscraper and it can be accomplished by low-skilled workers because Add an article
a high
such
a process does not need complex engineering plans. Linking Words
Nevertheless
, building grounded Linking Words
houses
Use synonyms
required
spacious Wrong verb form
requires
Use synonyms
area
and not every site is available with large empty Fix the agreement mistake
areas
land
Use synonyms
due to
the rise of population. Constructing Linking Words
this
type of housing is more suitable for rural Linking Words
Use synonyms
area
which is less populous.
In conclusion, I believe that despite the expensive cost, the high building is the best solution to provide more Fix the agreement mistake
areas
houses
in the urban Use synonyms
area
because of its saving in regard to Use synonyms
land
use. Meanwhile, grounded Use synonyms
houses
would be beneficial for Use synonyms
Use synonyms
area
that have a lot of empty Add an article
the area
an area
Fix the agreement mistake
land
lands
because it is more economical than Fix the agreement mistake
land
apartment
.Add an article
an apartment
the apartment
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task achievement
Your essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion, which is good. However, try to deepen your arguments with more specific examples and explanations to strengthen your task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Work on ensuring smooth transitions between ideas. While your coherence and cohesion are generally good, some sentences could be made clearer by linking them better to the previous or next point.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repeating words or phrases too often, as this can make your writing seem redundant. For example, instead of repeatedly using 'high building,' you can use synonyms like 'skyscraper' or 'multistory building.'
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a strong framework for your essay.
task achievement
Your main points are well-presented and generally supported by examples, which enhances your overall task response.
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