The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the modifications that have taken
places
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in
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Barmouth
town
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between 1936 and 2007.
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,
it is clear that
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all routes remain at the same position and most nature surrounding a
town
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is encroached on;
besides
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, plenty of facilities sprung up.
To begin
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with, looking at the
centre
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of the map, a post office, bank and library stayed untouched
while
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both sweet shop and butchers were combined and turned into a massive supermarket.
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, a flower shop was replaced by a travel agent building;
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a new enormous shopping
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was built at the
centre
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of the
town
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. What is interesting to note is that the spanking new shopping
centre
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size was almost the same as in the supermarket.
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, the three trees on the top left corner were cut and there was only one left in 2007. An old swayed and zigzag cycle path was demolished and a new smooth
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was constructed
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;
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, government offices and farmland located to the bottom right of the
town
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were changed their proposal to a museum and a golf course.
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, a number of accommodation cropped up in the top right corner of the map. What is surprising to see is that there are several areas available on the left side of the map but most facilities and amenities were cramped on the right side.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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