The best way for the government to solve the traffic congestion problems in cities is to provide free bus service 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that how to provide free
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in the city
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better for the street. On the one hand,many people think that congestion had made by
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of communities feel bad when they
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society of there have bought
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for going anywhere until we can go to our work as car,motorcycle,and
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realize
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ways to provide many
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car,
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one house for one car so that way it will
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of using their
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transportation
in order they would not have congestion in every
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information
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introduction and conclusion
Your introduction needs to clearly state your position on the topic. Although it appears you disagree with the presented view, it should be expressed more explicitly.
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Enhance the clarity of your ideas by using precise language and ensuring your sentences are grammatically correct. Simplify complex sentences to avoid confusion and ambiguity.
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Include specific and relevant examples to support each main point. This will strengthen your argument and demonstrate your ability to apply theoretical concepts to practical scenarios.
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Your essay attempts to address the topic from different angles, which shows that you are thinking critically about the issue.
introduction and conclusion
Your conclusion reiterates the need for government action, which aligns well with the main argument you attempted to build.

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