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the chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various free time activites in England.

the chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various free time activites in England.
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bar graph provides data for the proportion of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 who enjoy numerous activities in their leisure time in England. The numbers were measured in percentage (%).
Overall
, it can be witnessed that the highest figures were attributed to the number of people
prefer
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who prefer
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 watching television
while
 the opposite was true for individuals who are big on playing computer games.
Additionally
, the disparity between
two
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 genders was not extremely noticeable, except in the realm of shopping, utilizing the Internet and playing computer games. Looking at the figures in
further
 detail, it can be observed that the majority of British chose to watch TV for relaxation with more than 75% in both genders.
This
 figure in spending time with family members was relatively similar
that
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 both men and women
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roughly
three
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 quarter of England residents. The other numbers were
also
 great with more than 70% in both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 respectively for doing exercise and reading. Turning to the remaining statistics, there were
noticeably
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 disparities between boys and girls in shopping, using
the
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online websites and playing games.
While
 the percentage of women
played
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who played
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computer
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computers
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 was approximately 10%, there was up to 15% of men
chose
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who chose
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this
 activity to relax. More significantly, in terms of
accessing
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 to the Internet, the figure of men was as twice
as
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 its female counterparts, and the difference was even three times when people went shopping with only 27% male,
whereas
 the percentage of women was nearly 75%.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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