The diagram below show how drinking water is made using solar power.

The diagram below show how drinking water is made using solar power.
Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to how
water
that we drink
everyday
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is made from clean energy.
Overall
, it is a complex process, commencing with sunlight
affect into
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the underground to culminating with
water
contained in the container and ready to use. The procedure commences
the
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sunlight from the sun reference down to
solar
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a solar
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panel that will create
a
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power
then
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and then
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go through the converter. After that there will
have
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electricity
come
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from
converter
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the converter
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and
go
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to the pump
put
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into the ground. the
followings
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steps involve there will be
water
come
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from the pump and
go
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going
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into the
water
tank. Preparing
water
for drinking is the focus of the latter steps in the sequence. The
water
ino
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in
into
the
water
tank now
go
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through another tank. After
that
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the
water
can be
drink
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. The remaining
water
will contained in the container.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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