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The diagram below show how drinking water is made using solar power.

The diagram below show how drinking water is made using solar power.
Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to how
water
Use synonyms
 that we drink
everyday
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every day
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 is made from clean energy.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is a complex process, commencing with sunlight
affect into
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affecting
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 the underground to culminating with
water
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 contained in the container and ready to use. The procedure commences
the
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with the
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 sunlight from the sun reference down to
solar
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a solar
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 panel that will create
a
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apply
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power
Linking Words
then
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and then
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 go through the converter. After that there will
have
Verb problem
be
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 electricity
come
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coming
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 from
converter
Add an article
the converter
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 and
go
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going
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 to the pump
put
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and put
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 into the ground. the
followings
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following
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 steps involve there will be
water
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come
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coming
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 from the pump and
go
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going
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 into the
water
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 tank. Preparing
water
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 for drinking is the focus of the latter steps in the sequence. The
water
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ino
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in
into
 the
water
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 tank now
go
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goes
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 through another tank. After
that
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that,
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 the
water
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 can be
drink
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drunk
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. The remaining
water
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 will contained in the container.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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