The diagram below shows a life cycle of a fish

Illustrated in the given natural diagram is the life cycle of an alevin. From an observational perspective, it is noticeable how

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fish does not

under

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significant changes

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maturing, after being laid in the form of eggs, to end up with mating and reproduction,

haing

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having

lived in school.

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, resulting from 3-month being hatched under fresh water, the alevin is to be fed off in additional weeks using yolk-sac as an inevitable attachment. If successful in

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adequate food amount, it will turn into a fry, the period in which it takes up to between 5 or 10

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along with

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its swimming nature, prior to growing into a parr, when the fish has developed for several months

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forming what are called “finger” markings. Smolt is the next stage when the fish

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to group with others in order to together travel to sea as the next habitat for the remaining time from 1 to 8 years being an adult.

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spawning

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the spawning

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adult is 2 weeks before dying,

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simunateously

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simultaneously

ensuring

new

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a new

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generation.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

175 words

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