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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
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The
diagrame
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diagram
 illustrates the proportion of
the
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UK people (
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men
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 and
women
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) who take their time to do activities in
previous
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the previous
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 year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that housework, shopping, job hunting,
visiting
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and visiting
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friends
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 or relatives
is
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a trending activities that all
men
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 and
women
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 would prefer, with
exception
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 of afternoon
men
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which
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who
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is
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 not quite fancy about those activities. It
considered
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 that drinking and playing
sport
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sports
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is
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are
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 not quite keen on. Looking
in to
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 the
moring
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morning
men
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 and
women
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, it is
envident
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evident
 that housework and shopping for
women
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 were higher than
men
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 about 49%, 26% and
men
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 were 19%, 20%.
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, in job hunting and visiting
friends
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 or relatives, it was most
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preferred
prefered
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preferred
 by
men
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 and
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for
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women
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 for just the second in hunting
and
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about 22% in
men
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 and 16% in
women
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,
while
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 visiting
friends
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 is more choices in
women
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.
In gardening
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Gardening
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,
tv
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TV
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, reading, decorating, walking, playing
sport
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sports
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 and drinking
always
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are always
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 for
men
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.
However
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, nothing and sitting around and staying
bed
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in bed
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 were the same percentage
like
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as
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women
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 with the exception of visiting town. Turning to the afternoon routine, it is observed that housework, shopping job hunting,
visiting
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and visiting
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friends
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 or relatives were in the sight of
women
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 that quite interested in that stuff.
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in
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gardening,
tv
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TV
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, decorating, walking, nothing or sitting around, staying in bed so on were quite fancy for
men
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.
In contrast
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, reading and
visitng
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visiting
town
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towns
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were prefer
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 by
women
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 and with the
bigest
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 differences were not
participate
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participating
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 in staying in bed and playing
sport
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sports
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, friends with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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