The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The provided graph illustrates numeral information about museum visitors in
summer
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and
winter
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in 2003.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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summer
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visitors were much in number .
Besides
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, the museum visit was at its highest at noon and decreased after that.
To begin
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, from 00:00 to 9 AM, the place visits were at the minimum in
summer
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and
also
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in
winter
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.
Moreover
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, in
summer
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, from 9AM to 10:30 AM, the line increased significantly and reached to around 1300, and
then
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it rose modestly until 12 PM and it became 1500 and in
winter
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it rose until 10:00, it declines a little, it had some ups and downs until 12 o'clock, and it reached to over 600 persons . In additional, the
winter
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's line started to decline slightly after 12 PM and it ended at 18 o'clock.
Also
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, the
winter
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's line started to fall dramaticly after noon and at 14 o'clock it ended.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words summer, winter with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Peak season
  • Off-peak season
  • Visitor influx
  • Steady increase
  • Significant drop
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Seasonal variation
  • Cultural attraction
  • Tourism trends
  • Historical data
  • Visitor demographics
  • Analytical observation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Statistical evidence
  • Conclusive summary
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