You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
The provided graph illustrates numeral information about museum visitors in
summer
and winter
in 2003.
Overall
, it is clear that
summer
visitors were much in number . Besides
, the museum visit was at its highest at noon and decreased after that.
To begin
, from 00:00 to 9 AM, the place visits were at the minimum in summer
and also
in winter
. Moreover
, in summer
, from 9AM to 10:30 AM, the line increased significantly and reached to around 1300, and then
it rose modestly until 12 PM and it became 1500 and in winter
it rose until 10:00, it declines a little, it had some ups and downs until 12 o'clock, and it reached to over 600 persons . In additional, the winter
's line started to decline slightly after 12 PM and it ended at 18 o'clock. Also
, the winter
's line started to fall dramaticly after noon and at 14 o'clock it ended.Submitted by alikiadaah on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words summer, winter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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