The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The bar chart illustrates the time in
minutes
spent on three different call types in the UK between 1995 and 2002.
First,
the local fixed line was the most used way of telecommunication,
started
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from 70 and
then
increased
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until 1999 to almost 90
billion
minutes
.
However
, after 1999 the amount of time decreased to the initial level of 70. In terms of national and international-fixed lines, started with half compared to the local stationed line,
this
way of connection ended up with only 10
billion
minutes
less compared to the local stationed line.
Second,
the most strike increase was noted in mobile calls. Started as not significant, less than 5
billion
minutes
, it became nine times more used, albeit peaked in 2001 at almost 50, slightly decreased in 2002 to 45
billion
minutes
.
Overall
, there was a disparity in the way of telecommunication at the beginning of the period,
however
,
at the end
, the gaps became less noticeable. Fixed lines remained the most popular,
however
, started as less common,
the
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mobiles improved their position dramatically.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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