The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of larghe fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture represents the wheel of life of the
salmon
fish
.Initially
,the life of salmon
fish
starts with egg
Correct article usage
an egg
and
lives approximately Correct word choice
apply
for
5 years and attains a Change preposition
apply
length
of around 70-75cm.
To begin
with,salmon
eggs
are found in the downstreams
of the Correct your spelling
downstream
river
where the mature female fish
lays eggs
which are smaller than pebbles.Further
,egg
hatches and attains the fry Correct article usage
the egg
stage
followed by smolt and finally
reaches the
adulthood.
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apply
Initially
,the salmon
eggs
are present at the botton
of the upper Correct your spelling
bottom
river
, normally it takes 5-6 months for hatching
of Add an article
the hatching
eggs
and then
moves
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move
to
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too
fast
flowing Add an article
a fast
river
,during this
stage
the young ones are referred as
'Fry' and usually Change preposition
to as
ranges
in the Correct subject-verb agreement
range
length
of 3-5cm.It grows up in the lowest river
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for upto
upto
4 years and slowly fry Correct your spelling
up to
stage
change to 'Smolt' and in this
stage
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stage,
fish
attains the
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a
length
of 12-15cm.
After the 'Smolt' stage
,it is moved to open
sea where the Add an article
the open
salmon
fish
reaches its adulthood and acquires the
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a
length
of 70-76cm.The matured fish
lays Add an article
an egg
the egg
egg
and the Fix the agreement mistake
eggs
biorhytm
Correct your spelling
biorhythm
repeates
.Correct your spelling
repeated
repeats
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fish, length, cm, eggs, river, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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