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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides some data on the source of
police
 income in two years in some
part
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 of England. The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
the
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police
 expenditure in these years.
Overall
, it is evident that
,
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 the majority of
police
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 budget came from
national
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the national
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 government, and the highest proportion
spent
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was spent
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 on
police
personells’
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 wages.
According to
 the table,
the
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police
 revenues had a slight increase in 2018 compared to 2017.
National
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 government allocated less than 180
millions
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 Pounds in 2017 and 2018, 175.5 m and 177.8, respectively.
However
, the incomes from local taxes were about 91.2m in the former and 102.3 in the latter. The revenues from other sources
such
 as grants were approximately the same in
this
 period and just saw
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 increase in 2018. Turning to the pie charts, the pattern of the expenses
were
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some how
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 the same . In
the
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both years, around
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one-fourth
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 of the revenues went for officers and staff salaries. The building costs remained the same about 17 per cent. It is noticeable that
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 the money ,which was spent on
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the Technology
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 sector, doubled in 2018, from 8 % to 14%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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