Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many cases have shown that it is good to share information in scientific research, business and the academic world meanwhile others prefer to give
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data for pay. Actually,
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knowledge should be valuable and not
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be shared freely but sometimes available
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for people
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. On the one hand, most individuals choose to share
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academic works or scientific explorers for cash. Cause scientist spends plenty of time even half a year for some observations and selecting data.
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, from my individual experience, I have spent
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about 7 months
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my diploma work on Kazakh, English,
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advertising texts and I really appreciate
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assignment.
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, some humans claim that medical
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must be in open access.
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means everyone can get knowledge from special articles done by doctors whenever they
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.
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, in COVID-19, the hardest year
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the world, thousands of families
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and nobody
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how to rescue them. In order to treat patients doctors started to learn about it from varied educational sources and thanks to it they could rescue them from
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absolute new illness.
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, it is better to acquire paid information because of your
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respect
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time.
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observations
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for everybody who
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with sickness.
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Introduction
Improve your introduction by clearly defining the two perspectives and your own opinion. This will help guide the reader.
Transitions
Work on transitions between paragraphs and ideas to improve the logical flow. For instance, using phrases like 'Another argument for...' or 'On the contrary...' can help
Development
Ensure that each point is thoroughly supported with specific examples or evidence. This can strengthen your arguments.
Task Response
The topic is addressed from multiple perspectives, showing awareness of different viewpoints, which is a plus for task response.
Examples
Examples are provided to illustrate points, making your arguments more concrete.
Balanced Viewpoint
You offer a balanced view on the topic, weighing both sides before giving your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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