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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
bart
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bar
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people
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 living
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in canada
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canada
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are
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visit different places.
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, it can be seen that of
People
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 in born
Canada
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 is the
higest
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highest
. Meanwhile,
People
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migrants
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 born in other
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 is the lowest
of
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figure.
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 the one hand, Cinema is the bigger data which is
peole
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people
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canada
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 begin at 70 per
cent
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. followed by New
migrants
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 born in English-speaking
countries
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 at
approximatelly
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approximately
 65 per
cent
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.
Then
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 New
migrants
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 born in other
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is
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 at 50 per
cent
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.
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,
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the Library
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 started New
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is
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are
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 the
bigest
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 at about 55 per
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. followed by New
migrants
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countries
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 at the point
40
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of 40
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 per
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Then
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canada
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approximatelly
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approximately
 35 per
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. Zoo
begin
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begins
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 New
migrants
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 at 50 per
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. The next is
people
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 born in
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canada
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 amount 45 per
cent
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. The
last
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 is New
migrants
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 born in English-speaking
countries
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 at 35 per
cent
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.
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. the data is
lowest
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the lowest
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 Theatre. Starting New
migrants
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 born in English-speaking
countries
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 at amount 25 %. After that
people
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 born in
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canada
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 at 20 per
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. The
last
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,
People
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 new migrant in other
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 is at 10 %.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, migrants, countries, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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