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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen or pencil. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, we live in an epoch of computers, smartphones and the internet. For that reason, writing by hand is
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gradually
 vanishing over time. The tendency has disadvantages and advantages. In
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both points will be represented. At first glance, the tendency is absolutely inevitable. One
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undisputed argument is utterly quotidian, it is just convenient to make notes
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 your phone and not to take a copybook or a netbook all the time.
In addition
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, there are different handwritings that are not readable.
Therefore
, in those situations, a
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typed
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 of
this
 trend is saving the environment. First of all, paper production does demand a lot of wood, meaning that the more paper is needed, the more trees will be cut down. It is utterly understood how vital trees are.
Furthermore
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 a lot of additional plastic
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. In short summary, the trend may well help to save
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nature.
However
, the trend has
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 some negative sides.
Firstly
, writing by hand is really advantageous for kids.
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 is an interesting, but crucial scientific fact that developing fine motor skills is important for the
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 brains.
For instance
, it enhances neurogenesis. There is
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consequence
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 of
this
 phenomenon: caligraphy today is not
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 as it once was. It has been partially displaced by сomputer graphics. Another argument in
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 of writing by
hands
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 is how our memory works. If a person writes a difficult word multiple times, they have more chances to keep in mind how to spell it. In conclusion,
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 the tendency is inevitable and has more positive sides than
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negative ones, it is highly reasonable to save teaching handwriting.
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task achievement
The essay addresses the task effectively by discussing both reasons for the decline in handwriting and evaluating the trend as both positive and negative. However, some points could be expanded or supported with more specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Aim for a clearer and more consistent structure. The introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion should flow logically with smooth transitions.
coherence cohesion
Ensure to proofread your work for small errors such as 'gredually' instead of 'gradually' and 'typped' instead of 'typed'. Such errors can distract readers from your arguments.
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Try to enhance your argumentation with more specific and relevant examples. This will help in making your essay more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which helps the reader follow your arguments.
task achievement
You have presented a balanced view by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of the decline in handwriting. This shows an understanding of the complexity of the issue.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Convenience
  • Efficiency
  • Curriculums
  • Environmental benefits
  • Productivity
  • Accessibility
  • Cognitive development
  • Personal touch
  • Overreliance
  • Data insecurity
  • Privacy issues
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