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Band 5.5

The charts show the time spent on two devices according to various categories. Describe the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given pie charts provide information about the time division of two electronic devices
involves
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smartphones and
tablets
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 which were categorized
in
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 six portions. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, there are some notable
variation
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 in users’ preferences
of
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for
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 using these two gadgets. The most
significance differ
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 refers to playing games in which the tendency of tablet users
to
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it
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is large, in comparison with cell phone users.
To begin
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 with the cell phone time consumers, the noticeable portion of it witnesses games, which accounts for more than a third of the whole followed by contributing
in
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 social networking, which is made up 29%.
In contrast
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, in terms of the least time spent,
news
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 is the least popular program. Moving on to
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tablets
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 timing, it is observed that more than half of the usages of
tablets
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 belong to games like cell phones. It was mentioned before that news was the avoided program, calendar, clock
and
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voice, etc which were named utilities are the unlikeable
application
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applications
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 in
tablets
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tablets with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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