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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Lsilp as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Lsilp as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The maps give some information about
development
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the development
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 of Islip
where
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which
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 is the
down
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downtown
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town
 of
an
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a
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 small city
that is
 going to
make
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build
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 more
builiding
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building
buildings
. The countryside of
this
town
are
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is
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 going to
cahnge
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change
 by making a car park, shopping
center
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centre
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 and a bus station How ever it is likely to make
a
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apply
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new housing beside the
carpark
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car park
. There is a main road above the shops currently
an
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and
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 it will be to be a
pedesterian
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pedestrian
 only
however
, shops line it
it
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no
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not
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 going to
has
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have
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 any
chanches
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chances
changes
 but across the
park
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park,
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 it is creating
a
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new housing. Around all of these places will make a Dual
carrigeway
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carriageway
wich
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which
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 is so huge.
also
 the school in
this
town
geting
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getting
 a bigger place.
This
delovpment
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development
 of
town
it
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is going to do as soon as possible and make their
sitizens
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citizens
 life easier and more comfortable.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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