The diagram shows how hydro-electric power is generated. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main details.

The diagram shows how hydro-electric power is generated. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main details.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows how hydro-electric power is generated. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main details.
Presented for consideration is a diagram
pertainning
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pertaining
to stages involved in the process of creating
electricity
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from
water
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.
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, it can be observed that there are more than 4 stages starting with the evaporation of
water
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and
end
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up with being passed through the transformer station to produce
electricity
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for human
usages
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. In the initial stage, hydro is evaporated from
sea
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the sea
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by the sun's heating, forming clouds
as a result
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. Once clouds are formed, rains are likely to happen and filter the
water
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bank in
dam
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the dam
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,
then
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, valve opening and
closuring
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closing
transfer
water
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to the turbine and being pumped back to the
water
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tank, creating the reservoir phenomenon. Turning to the subsequent stage in transforming
water
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into
electricity
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, the former output spin the turbine wheels, spawning
electricity
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before wiring in high
voltages
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cables.By
this
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point ,
this
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raw energy is travelled to the transformer station, where
electricity
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is delivered to households, plants and schools for
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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