Сountries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think that it is positive or negative development?

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in the world are getting extremely alike to each other and the reason is that we have access to

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similar products and services and have international social networks which

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world, I personally believe that

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has both plus and minus points and we can not surely stand with one side whether it is good or bad. In

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will give my opinion on that and try to draw some conclusions.

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because it facilitates to

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own values,

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and

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because when all

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are getting alike it means that people will strive to look up to each other, naturally it will lead to that people will start forgetting their

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and

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which always make them unique and differentiate them from others,

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: as we can see now in most cases, the new generations try to mimic and observe Western values and

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which may lead to vanishing own

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and

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major drawback of

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is that

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sometimes used to intervene

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or even start

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and The USA perfectly embodies that, The USA invaded and

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everything up in a lot of

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as Iraq, Libya, Syria and so on.

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the USA totally eradicated the infrastructure of that

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and killed so many civilians

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that country and

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that because they were different and

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not share their values.

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the

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is that if any country

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will not be careless and try to help

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that country which is in the trouble,

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, when Palestine

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oppression and being displaced from their own land,

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whole world go on strike and try to protest against

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All things considered, in my point of view

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has both advantages and disadvantages,

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and using that as

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to start wars,

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forgetting own

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and

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. But we should consider that it may be useful when it comes to providing aid and helping other nations.