The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994 .

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994

.
The given pie charts depict the proportion of
males
and
females
who were captured and the bar chart shows the reasons for capturing in the five years ending 1994.
Overall
, the portion of
males
who were arrested was more than arrested
females
and the main reason for arrest was public drinking for both genders. It is clear from the data that just above a third of
males
were arrested and 68 per
cent
of them were not arrested.
On the other hand
, the proportion of arrested
females
was much less than arrested
males
just below 10 per
cent
and about 90 per
cent
of them were not arrested. The main reason of arresting for both genders was public drinking, but it is interesting to note that the portion of
females
who were arrested
due to
this
reason was more than
males
just over 35 per
cent
for women and just above 30 per
cent
for men. The portion of
males
who were arrested
due to
drunk driving, breach of order, robbery, and other reasons was more than
females
by about a quarter, just under 20 per
cent
, just over 15 per
cent
, and about 20 per
cent
, respectively. The percentage of
females
who were captured
due to
violence was more than
males
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Incarceration
  • Proportion
  • Pie chart
  • Bar chart
  • Demographic data
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Correctional facilities
  • Legislation
  • Criminal justice system
  • Crime rate
  • Felony
  • Misdemeanor
  • Recidivism
  • Deterrence
  • Rehabilitation
  • Policy makers
  • Law enforcement agencies
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