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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994 .

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994 .
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The given pie charts depict the proportion of
males
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 and
females
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 who were captured and the bar chart shows the reasons for capturing in the five years ending 1994.
Overall
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, the portion of
males
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 who were arrested was more than arrested
females
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 and the main reason for arrest was public drinking for both genders. It is clear from the data that just above a third of
males
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 were arrested and 68 per
cent
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 of them were not arrested.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of arrested
females
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 was much less than arrested
males
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 just below 10 per
cent
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 and about 90 per
cent
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 of them were not arrested. The main reason of arresting for both genders was public drinking, but it is interesting to note that the portion of
females
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 who were arrested
due to
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this
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 reason was more than
males
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 just over 35 per
cent
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 for women and just above 30 per
cent
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 for men. The portion of
males
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 who were arrested
due to
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 drunk driving, breach of order, robbery, and other reasons was more than
females
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 by about a quarter, just under 20 per
cent
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, just over 15 per
cent
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, and about 20 per
cent
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, respectively. The percentage of
females
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 who were captured
due to
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 violence was more than
males
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Incarceration
  • Proportion
  • Pie chart
  • Bar chart
  • Demographic data
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Correctional facilities
  • Legislation
  • Criminal justice system
  • Crime rate
  • Felony
  • Misdemeanor
  • Recidivism
  • Deterrence
  • Rehabilitation
  • Policy makers
  • Law enforcement agencies
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