Some people believe that it is better to live in a city than in a rural area. Others argue that life in the countryside is preferable. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many
people
assume that
are
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there are
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many
benefits
to living in a
city
than a rural area,
however
, is lot of
community
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communities
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say living in the
countryside
preferable
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is preferable
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. I will discuss a couple of things above
according to
my opinion from environmental, personal, and economic perspectives. On the one hand,
that
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there
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are several
benefits
to
life
inside the
city
such
as having many jobs in surrounding
areas
because there are many companies that need job seekers and
people
are able to apply for jobs
easier
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easily
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than
counryside
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countryside
,
this
situation has
benefits
people
who need some job on their lives.
For instance
, many individuals who move from the
countryside
to gain a job there can easily offer their skills to some company in order to increase their
economical
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economic
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and be able to change their living standard.
In addition
, living in a
city
nearby
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near
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shopping
centre
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centres
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and
playground
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playgrounds
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,
therefore
,
people
do not have to spend their time and money to find
it
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them
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.
On the other hand
,
life
in the
countryside
has several
benefits
such
as a friendly environment.
For instance
, the
countryside
has good behaviour in their society because
between
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neighbour
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neighbours
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are able to help each other,
therefore
society in
a rural
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rural areas
a rural area
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areas
is not worried if they have many problems
such
as needing money for something important and can protect each other.
In addition
,
life
in rural
areas
never causes
traffict
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traffic
and air pollution because the street activities are not as busy as in the
city
centre and no factories in the
countryside
that can produce air pollution on a high scale. In conclusion,
life
in the
city
centre is beneficial for companies,
however
,
life
in a rural
city
is more convenient because has a good environment for each other.
Therefore
,
life
in
this
couple's area depends on individual needs. They can choose between these two
areas
according to
their purpose or goals.
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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Provide more relevant examples that directly substantiate your points. Use specific details and elaborate on them to strengthen your argument and illustrate your points vividly.
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You have identified and discussed the perspectives on both urban and rural living, giving your opinion in the conclusion.
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