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Band 5.5

You live near a university and would like to earn some extra money by renting a room in your apartment to a student. Write a letter to the university housing office. In your letter, • introduce yourself • explain why your apartment would be a good living place for a student • describe the room you have for rent

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 email finds you well, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I have a free
room
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 for
renting
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rent
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, as I
belelive
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believe
 one of our university students can get
use
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used
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from
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to
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 it. My name is
nouf
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Nouf
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, I am studying English at our university.
Due to
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 the fact, that my place is really close to the campus, as I have an extra
room
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 in my apartment,I am offering
this
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room
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 for rent. It's a suitable place to live as one of the
univercity
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university
 members, because of how the
liberary
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library
 and the supermarket, as well,
a
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as a
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pharmecy
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pharmacy
is
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are
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 located
all
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together near the apartment.So everything a person might need is available. Now, I will
decribe
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describe
 to you how great the
room
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 is. It's a big
room
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 with a studying desk
,
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and a large
capent
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cabinet
carpet
 with storage features. Looking
to
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forward to
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hear
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hearing
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 from you, and if you need any additional details you can reach me by email. NOUF MUT Best Regards,
Submitted by noufxmut on

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grammar and spelling
Be sure to proofread your letter to correct small spelling and grammar mistakes (e.g., 'belelive' should be 'believe', 'liberary' should be 'library', and 'pharmecy' should be 'pharmacy').
task achievement
Consider expanding your description by including more details about the apartment's amenities and the room itself. This would make your letter more inviting and informative.
coherence
Aim to separate distinct ideas into different paragraphs to improve readability. For example, you can have one paragraph for the introduction, one for the apartment's location, one for the room description, etc.
suitable writing tone
The letter is polite and the tone is appropriate for the context.
task achievement
You clearly introduced yourself and explained why the apartment would be a good place for a student to live.
greeting and closing
Your closing and call to action are effective and polite.
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