The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The maps illustrate an industrial zone within the town of Norbiton,
along with
proposed future
and
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changes and developments for the area.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
according to
future plans, many facilities to develop
this
area will be added,
such
as
,
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many houses, shops, playground, medical centre and school. First and
above all
, farmland will be replaced to the right corner of the river,
although
many things will be added with regard to regional planning.
Additionally
, as most of the factories will
replace
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by houses, some factories will transform into shops. Despite keeping the central roundabout, there are plans to construct a bridge starting from
farmland
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the farmland
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,
countinue
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continue
across the river, and
creating
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a new pathway in the north.
This
new route will serve to connect to
residental
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residential
areas on the opposite side of the river with
exist
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infrastructure.
Furthermore
, a smaller roundabout will be connected with
main
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roundabout and
this
case will lead to
enhance
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accessibility to the shops and medical centre which
are locate
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between these roundabouts.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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