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In many countries, boys and girls have to study in separate schools and colleges. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this policy.

#countries #boys #girls #study #schools #colleges #policy
Today’s
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 world,
boys
 and
girls
 in
educational
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the educational
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area
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 have to go to
the
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schools and colleges which are separate in many
countries
.
And
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This
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this
 situation has been a subject of debate. It might be
effectible
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effective
 for student’s grades but not for
improvement
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the improvement
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for
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 their emotional quotient. One of the advantages of separate education institutes is that it will support
to
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student’s
pat
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path
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 of being successful. To give an example, if
boys
 and
girls
which
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study without segregation of
gender
 and
fell
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 in love with each other when
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some issues about their relationships they would face
lack
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a lack
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 of interest
against
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in
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 their responsibilities. Another advantage is that
this
 implementation will increase the
amount
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number
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 of
girls
 who are studied. In some
countries
, strict parents do not want
to
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apply
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their daughters to study with
boys
.
However
, there are disadvantages
of
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to
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this
 policy. The one that students who are not unfamiliar
to achieve
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with achieving
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 something with other
gender
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genders
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 can be unsuccessful
to make
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in making
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 conversation or
share
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 information in their work life.
This
 situation can lead to social inequality in these
countries
. Another disadvantage is that it can cause numerous problems
about
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with
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gender
 roles in society. If they did not learn
importance
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the importance
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 of
gender
 roles they could not cope with their
adult’s
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adult
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 life issues
for instance
 in their marriage or when they grew up
their
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with their
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 children. In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages when
boys
 and
girls
 study in separate schools and colleges. I think I would certainly support the students should go the education institutes which are not separate. It is not good for the development of society if
this
 implementation
continue
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 in these
countries
.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the main points of the topic and presents both advantages and disadvantages as required. However, try to give more specific and detailed examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention particular studies or statistics to strengthen your case.
coherence cohesion
The essay's ideas flow generally well, with a clear introduction and conclusion. Still, focus on improving the logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph transitions smoothly from one point to the next. Consider using more linking words and phrases (e.g., furthermore, in addition, however) to enhance cohesion.
clarity
To improve clarity, focus on sentence structure and grammar. Ensure that your sentences are complete and avoid run-on sentences. Also, work on varying your sentence structures to keep the reader engaged.
content
You have a clear understanding of the topic and provide a balanced discussion by mentioning both advantages and disadvantages of separate education for boys and girls.
structure
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, helping to orient the reader and summarize your perspective.

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