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You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: explain why you are writing express concern about the missing card ask them what they intend to do Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear __________

#bank #receipt #card #envelope #head #office #concern #address #__________
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to
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 my concern regarding not receiving my debit
card
 in the new customer onboarding parcel. I opened my
bank
 account with HDFC
bank
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Bank
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, using
online
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the online
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 facility provided by the
bank
 and , I was expecting my banking documents
though
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through
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 the post service which includes
credit
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a credit
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card
,
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and check
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check book
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chequebook
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. I received an envelope on the 27th of June from HDFC
Bank
, Mumbai branch.
While
 opening the parcel I found
banking
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my banking
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card
 missing. I was planning to go to my home town next week and need a banking
card
 to make online payments
of
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 my flight bookings.
This
 was one of the main
motive
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 for opening
account
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an account
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 with your
bank
. I would request you to take
couple
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a couple
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 of actions in
this
 matter.
Firstly
, Please investigate the cause of
missing
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the missing
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card
 in the first parcel, and
also
 send another credit
card
 to my address on
urgent
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an urgent
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 basis. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Sandeep
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grammar
Check for minor grammatical errors, especially with article usage (e.g., 'using the online facility', 'received a rather than 'an') and punctuation.
details
Add a bit more detail or context to explain why it is crucial to have the banking card for your trip; this will enhance task achievement by providing a fuller response.
tone
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, fitting for communication with a bank.
clarity
You have clearly explained the situation, why it concerns you, and what actions you hope the bank will take.
structure
The letter is generally well-organized and maintains focus on the main idea in each paragraph.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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