The table graph illustrates football, basketball, cricket, rugby, and swimming in terms of how many boys in 6-11 and 12-16 took part in these sports in the UK in 2013 Overal
The given table gives
the
information about five outdoor activities in terms of different Correct article usage
apply
aged
Replace the word
age
group
Fix the agreement mistake
groups
people
who participated in these sports in Change preposition
of people
United
Kingdom in the year Correct article usage
the United
of
2013.In the following Change preposition
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paragraphs
I will describe the variation and comparison where needed.
It has Add a comma
paragraphs,
beej
clearly seen thatCorrect your spelling
been
,
Remove the comma
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Correct quantifier usage
more above
above
150 adult Change preposition
than
boys
took part in swimming but in another
sports Correct quantifier usage
other
boys
of age
Add an article
the age
of
6-11 took more participation. In football and Change preposition
apply
hockey
only Add a comma
hockey,
little
number of adults Correct word choice
a small
had been
seen.
Wrong verb form
were
Moreover
, boys
are more interested in playing football as well as
basketball where the number of adult players declined.
Overall
, it is evident that in 2013 swimming was the favourite outdoor activity of boys
,girls and adults but this
trend is
decreased in football and basketball.Unnecessary verb
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