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The table graph illustrates football, basketball, cricket, rugby, and swimming in terms of how many boys in 6-11 and 12-16 took part in these sports in the UK in 2013 Overal

The table graph illustrates football, basketball, cricket, rugby, and swimming in terms of how many boys in 6-11 and 12-16 took part in these sports in the UK in 2013 Overal
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The given table gives
the
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information about five outdoor activities in terms of different
aged
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group
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groups
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people
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of people
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 who participated in these sports in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in the year
of
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2013.In the following
paragraphs
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 I will describe the variation and comparison where needed. It has
beej
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been
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 clearly seen that
,
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Correct quantifier usage
more above
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above
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than
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 150 adult
boys
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 took part in swimming but in
another
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other
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 sports
boys
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 of
age
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the age
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of
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6-11 took more participation. In football and
hockey
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hockey,
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 only
little
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a small
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 number of adults
had been
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were
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 seen.
Moreover
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,
boys
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 are more interested in playing football
as well as
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 basketball where the number of adult players declined.
Overall
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, it is evident that in 2013 swimming was the favourite outdoor activity of
boys
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,girls and adults but
this
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 trend
is
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decreased in football and basketball.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • participation
  • age group
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • trends
  • potential reasons
  • insights
  • breakdown
  • younger
  • older
  • surprising findings
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