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The table shows the cost of water in five cities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the cost of water in five cities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the information about the price of
water
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 in five different Australian
cities
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.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the
cost
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 of
water
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 from
Adelaide
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,
Perth
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 and Brisbane
cities
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increase
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increases
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 when its
usage
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change
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changes
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 over 125
KL
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.
Moreover
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,
Perth
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city
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City
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 has the highest average
cost
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,
while
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Melbourne
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city
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City
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 has the lowest average
bill
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. As can
bee
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be
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 seen from the table,
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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cities
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 have the same amount of money per
KL
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.
Furthermore
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,
Sydney
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city
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 ranked in first position in
usage
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change
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 up to 125KL with $0.98 per
KL
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, but the payment of
water
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 of the
city
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 when the
usage
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 is over 125
KL
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 does not
change
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, and the same trend is true for
Melbourne
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city
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 too, where
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cost
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the cost
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 of
water
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 up to 125
Kl
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 is $0.78 and its
bill
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 does not
change
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 when the
usage
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 is over 125
KL
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. Moving to the price of
water
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 from
Adelaide
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 and
Perth
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cities
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, the residents in both
Adelaide
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 and
Perth
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cities
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 have to pay more money, and the
cost
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 of
water
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 in
Adelaide
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 and
Perth
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 share the same amount of money.
However
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, their price will increase almost 2 times and approximately triple
with
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in
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Perth
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city
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.
Finally
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, the
cost
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 of
water
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 in Brisbane
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city
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City
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 increased slightly from $0.81 in
usage
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 up to 125
KL
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 to $0.84 in
usage
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 over 125
KL
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. Regarding the remaining figure of the average
bill
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,
Perth
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City
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city
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City
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 is the most expensive, at $332, which is $13 higher than
that
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apply
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apply
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of
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apply
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Sydney
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.
Additionally
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, there is no significant difference between the payment of
water
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 in
Adelaide
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 and Brisbane
cities
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, at $312 and $310, respectively, which follow the
bill
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 of
water
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 in
Sydney
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city
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. Ultimately,
Melbourne
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 has the smallest average
bill
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 in the table, at $253.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, cities, cost, adelaide, perth, usage, change, kl, city, melbourne, bill, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost of living
  • urban infrastructure
  • utility rates
  • supply and demand
  • metropolitan areas
  • water consumption
  • price variation
  • tariff systems
  • economic factors
  • budget allocation
  • household expenditure
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