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You recently took a trip to another city, and you had a plan to visit your friend who is living there. However, you couldn’t see him/her. Write a letter to your friend, and Apologize for not being able to meet. Give your reasons. Suggest how you can meet some other time.

#trip #city #plan #visit #friend #couldn’t #time
Dear Jhon, How have you been recently? I hope
this
 letter finds you safe and sound. I am writing
this
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message
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 just to say ocean sorry since I
am
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was
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 unable to meet you a couple of
day's
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days
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 ago.
Besides
, I
am be
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 grateful if you
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are avalaible
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avalaible
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available
 next week. I arrived in Rome
in
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on
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 Saturday
last
 week and planned to meet you
next
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the next
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day
's afternoon.
However
, I received many tasks from my
employeer
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employer
employee
 that morning and was asked to finish it as
son
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soon
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 as possible.
Therefore
, I am staying
on
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 my room and don't go anywhere for a couple of days to solve the
taks
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tasks
task
. Once again I say big sorry for
unpredictable
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 situation. Fortunately, I am going to
rome
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Rome
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 for
second
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the second
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times
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time
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 to attend
celebration
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the celebration
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day
 next month. I have free
times
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time
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 a couple of
day's
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days
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 after
meeting
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the meeting
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, and I hope you
has
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a
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some
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 leisure time to have a cup
a
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of
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 coffee with me
at
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on
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saturday
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Saturday
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 evening in your favorite cafe. Just let me know if you are OK with my offer. I am looking forward to hearing you soon Yours sincerely, Edward
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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complete response
You have addressed all parts of the task. However, there are a few grammatical errors and slight misunderstandings that could be improved. Reviewing and editing to ensure grammatical accuracy and clarity would enhance the overall quality of your letter.
logical structure
Your ideas are organized logically and coherently, but some sentences have minor errors that affect readability. Rewriting complex sentences for clarity and double-checking for spelling and grammar would improve cohesion.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is generally suitable and friendly. To enhance the formality slightly, you should avoid overly casual phrases such as 'ocean sorry' and some minor errors in word choice.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate and friendly, which creates a good impression.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph clearly focuses on a single idea, making your letter easy to follow.
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