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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar diagram here
categoriges
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categories
categorizes
 the portion of
population
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the population
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 in five Australian
cities
, which are, Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
 and
Hobart
, in terms of their
coffee
 and tea consumption
habit
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habits
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 in
four
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a
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weeks
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week
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 period.
Overall
, in all the
cities
, more
people
 went to
cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffee
 or tea
rathar
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rather
 than buying fresh or instant
coffee
, except for the city of
Adelaide
.
However
, in all the
cities
 the least percentages of
people
 preferred to buy fresh
coffe
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coffee
 universally. A
staggaring
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staggering
 number of 60% or more
people
 went to
cafe
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cafes
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 for tea or
coffee
 in the
cities
 of Sydney, Melbourne and
Hobart
. These
cities
 are
also
 ahead in the category of buying fresh
coffee
, standing at around 45% for Sydney, 40% for Melbourne and just below 40% for
hobart
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Hobart
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.
Conversely
, In Brisbane and
Adelaide
, around 55% and 50%
people
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of people
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 respectively went to
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the cafe
a cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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. Where almost 35%
people
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of people
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 bought fresh
coffee
.
Incase
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In case
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 of
intant
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instant
coffee
, the scenario is almost reversed, except for the city of
Hobart
. Here, 50% or more
people
 bought
intant
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instant
intent
coffe
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coffee
 in Brisbane and
Adelaide
.
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