IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#maps #show #centre #town #islip #plans #development #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The two layouts compare the existing
pland
Correct your spelling
plans
plant
plan
 of Islip and its proposed plan for
future
Correct article usage
the future
show examples
.
Overall
, it is evident that some major changes are going to take place, particularly a new
carriage way
Correct your spelling
carriageway
show examples
 will be constructed. As we can see,
dual
Correct article usage
a dual
show examples
 carriage path will be added around the city centre and connected to the main road outside the centre. The main outstanding feature is that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 some parts of the countryside, which is located
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the north, will be added to the city
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
. The first shops raw will be
demilished
Correct your spelling
demolished
diminished
 and some new facilities
such
 as
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 bus station, shopping centre, parking area and new housing will be opened. The second main
shops
Change to a genitive case
shop's
shops'
show examples
 raws will
be remained
Change to the active voice
remain
have remained
show examples
 and the main road will be
transfomed
Correct your spelling
transformed
 to
pedestarian
Correct your spelling
pedestrian
 way. The
play ground
Correct your spelling
playground
show examples
 will
be remained
Change to the active voice
remain
have remained
show examples
 in the southeast of the town
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 but in
smaller
Add an article
a smaller
show examples
 size. A new residential area will be built next to the park. The school building will be
extented
Correct your spelling
extended
 in its size and
remained
Wrong verb form
remain
show examples
 on the south part of the
carriage way
Correct your spelling
carriageway
show examples
, next to the housing area.
Submitted by Negar_seddigh on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: