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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the rate of manufacturing of primary kinds
fuel
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of fuel
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 in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
,
production
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the production
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 of petroleum fluctuated and reached the highest amount in the given time period.
In contrast
, coal showed a downward trend
while
 natural gas
production
 significantly increased over the years. First and
above all
,
producing
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the production
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 of petroleum
have
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has
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highest
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the highest
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 numbers in all years.
In addition
, between 1981 and 1986, it increased from around 90 to about 140 and following years it decreased wildly until
in
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apply
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1991. And it saw an upward trend and in the final year reached
the
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about 140
millions
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million
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tonnes
. In 1981,
production
 levels of coal started with about 80 million
tonnes
 and after saw a downward trend it rose steadily and slightly reduced between 1991 and 2000 and reached just below
the
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40 million
tonnes
 in 2000.
To
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In
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 opposite coal
production
,
manufacturing
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and manufacturing
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 of natural gas significantly rose and arrived
just
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at just
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 over
the
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100
millions
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million
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tonnes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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