The line graph shows theft per thousand vehchiles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows theft per thousand vehchiles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.
This
line graph shows
the
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information about how many
vehchiles
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vehicles
were stolen in four European countries including
great
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Britain
, Sweden, France, and Canada between 1990 and 1999.
Overally
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Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
the
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great
Britain
had the highest
rate
of
car
theft
among all,
whereas
, in almost all of the time frame given in the question,
they
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there
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were fewer cars stolen in Canada. By looking at the details, regarding
great
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Britain
, it can be seen that the
figure
showing
car
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the car
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theft
rate
in
great
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Great
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Britain
fluctuated over time. at the
begining
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beginning
of the given period, just under 20
vehchiles
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vehicles
were being stolen per 1000
vehchiles
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vehicles
. After that the
rate
of cars that were being stolen rose, reaching its peak at
year
1992.
Following
this
, the number of
vehchiles
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vehicles
reported to be stolen dropped slightly, but rose
agian
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again
hit
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it
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its
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peak
at
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in
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1996. It
was
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followed
gradual
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a gradual
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drop in the
theft
rate
the
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in the
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next 4 years,
however
, great
Britain
ended
this
period with
highest
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the highest
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among all three. With respect to Sweden,
at
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in
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1990, it had the second highest
car
theft
rate
after
Britain
. After an initial slight decline, the
rate
of
car
theft
gradually increased in the following 4 years, after which it rose sharply to about 12 per 1000 stolen vehicles in
year
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the year
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1996.
Following
this
, having remained stable for 3 years,
at
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in
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the final
year
of the time frame, the
figure
reached its peak. If we look at
the
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France's
figure
, it can be elucidated that in
this
country, in 1990, the number of
car
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cars
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which were stolen was lower compared to
it's
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its
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counterparts.
However
, in the first
year
of the period, the
rate
showed a moderate increase. surpassing Canada's
figure
. After that, the
figure
fluctuated slightly
,
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and
then
fell marginally to just above 5 vehicles per 1000 yearly stealing
rate
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehchiles, britain, rate, car, theft, figure, year with synonyms.
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