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The line graph shows theft per thousand vehchiles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows theft per thousand vehchiles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.
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This
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 line graph shows
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information about how many
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vehchiles
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vehicles
 were stolen in four European countries including
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Britain
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, Sweden, France, and Canada between 1990 and 1999.
Overally
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, what stands out from the graph is that
the
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great
Britain
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 had the highest
rate
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 of
car
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theft
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 among all,
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, in almost all of the time frame given in the question,
they
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 were fewer cars stolen in Canada. By looking at the details, regarding
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Britain
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, it can be seen that the
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 showing
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car
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the car
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theft
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rate
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 in
great
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Britain
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 fluctuated over time. at the
begining
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beginning
 of the given period, just under 20
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vehchiles
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vehicles
 were being stolen per 1000
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vehchiles
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vehicles
. After that the
rate
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 of cars that were being stolen rose, reaching its peak at
year
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 1992.
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this
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, the number of
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vehchiles
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vehicles
 reported to be stolen dropped slightly, but rose
agian
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again
hit
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it
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its
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 peak
at
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 1996. It
was
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followed
gradual
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a gradual
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 drop in the
theft
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rate
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the
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 next 4 years,
however
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, great
Britain
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 ended
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 period with
highest
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the highest
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 among all three. With respect to Sweden,
at
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in
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 1990, it had the second highest
car
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theft
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rate
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 after
Britain
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. After an initial slight decline, the
rate
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 of
car
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theft
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 gradually increased in the following 4 years, after which it rose sharply to about 12 per 1000 stolen vehicles in
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year
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 1996.
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, having remained stable for 3 years,
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 the final
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 of the time frame, the
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 reached its peak. If we look at
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France's
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, it can be elucidated that in
this
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 country, in 1990, the number of
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car
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cars
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 which were stolen was lower compared to
it's
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its
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 counterparts.
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, in the first
year
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 of the period, the
rate
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 showed a moderate increase. surpassing Canada's
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. After that, the
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 fluctuated slightly
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 and
then
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 fell marginally to just above 5 vehicles per 1000 yearly stealing
rate
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "following this, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehchiles, britain, rate, car, theft, figure, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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