The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK.

The provided bar chart compares the three kinds of fossil fuels namely petroleum, carbon dioxide, and mineral greenhouse gas in Britain between 1990 and 2010.

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, it is clearly observed that

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carbon dioxide experienced an upward trend compared to others during the period shown.

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, what stands out is that the mineral, which was in the highest position at the beginning, eventually was in the lowest position

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of the period. On the one hand, there was an increase in total gas emissions from 1990 to 2010. As the data shows in 1990,

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figure started at around 200

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and rose gradually to roughly 300

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. It made the top position of contribution to greenhouse gas in the UK.

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, the volume of coal and oil decreased during the same time.

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, the number of coal began at approximately 330

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continued to decline to 180

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. Meanwhile, the quantities of oil had a deviation trend which started

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270

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tons

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and next saw a dip to 230 before it bounced back to 260

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tons

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this

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pattern finished at 210

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