Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many people think that
professionals
Change the noun form
professional
jobs
such
as doctors
and engineers should be work
in the Wrong verb form
worked
country
where they did school and training, while
others think this
professional Correct determiner usage
these
jobs
could work
in different country
as they wish. In my opinion, these professional Fix the agreement mistake
countries
jobs
better
working in the Add a missing verb
are better
country
where they learnt than
different Correct your spelling
that
country
, because they have been equipped and informed by the charactheristic
Correct your spelling
characteristic
characteristics
about
that Change preposition
of
country
and trained to develop some beneficial skills to solve the countries
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country's
problem
.
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problems
On the other hand
, these professional
should Fix the agreement mistake
professionals
be allow
to Change the verb form
be allowed
work
in places that they want, because this
belong
to their human right to choose the right places for working. Change the verb form
belongs
However
, many professional
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professionals
pursuing
their degree abroad Wrong verb form
pursue
because
the lack of facilities in their home universities that not Add the preposition
because of
supporting
Wrong verb form
support
they
Correct pronoun usage
their
degree
a lot. Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
For example
, after finishing the degree, they came back to their home town and serve
their society. Wrong verb form
served
As a result
, they build some innovation to their own environment based on what expertise they had when they studied abroad. They also
involved Add a missing verb
were also
to developed
their home town Change preposition
in developing
to
Change preposition
in
the
better direction.
Correct article usage
a
However
, most of the time, the professional studied and trained about the countries
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country's
countries'
problem
where they studied and Fix the agreement mistake
problems
develop
some beneficial skills to solve some Wrong verb form
developed
countries
related problems. In order if they Change noun form
country's
countries'
ready
to Add a missing verb
are ready
work
, they will be able to solve these commons
problems in society, because they Change the noun form
common
well
prepared when they Add a missing verb
are well
studied
in university. For specific, Wrong verb form
study
doctors
in tropical countries
must be able to cure some diseases related to the tropical weather such
as malaria, and tuberculosis. These kind
of Change the determiner
This kind
These kinds
diseases
only available in tropical Add a verb
diseases are
diseases were
countries
and not available in four seasonal country
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countries
due to
their zoonosis that only lived in some specific conditions in tropical counties. Obviously, doctor from four seasonal countries
not
well study and Add a missing verb
do not
experienced
Wrong verb form
experience
this
disease because it is
not happen in their Verb problem
does
countries
and uncommon
. Add a missing verb
is uncommon
For example
, if doctors
from four seasonal countries
practice their work
in tropical countries
and found
their Wrong verb form
find
patient
with unfamiliar Fix the agreement mistake
patients
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
disease
, Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
this
might lead to wrong diagnosis
and treatments for the patients.
Fix the agreement mistake
diagnoses
To conclude
, professional jobs
such
as doctors
and engineers better to
Change the verb form
working
work
at
the Change preposition
in
countries
they have been Wrong verb form
practised
practice
and familiar with, Correct your spelling
practised
this
is because they have been developed some beneficial skills to solve the countries
problemsChange noun form
country's
countries'
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task response
Your essay addresses both views on the topic, but your arguments could be more clearly developed. Try to provide more balanced arguments for both sides and ensure your ideas are fully elaborated with relevant examples. For instance, you could provide specific reasons why professionals might choose to work in a different country.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, there are some areas where transitions between ideas can be improved to enhance coherence. Try to use more linking words and phrases to make the progression of your ideas smoother.
task response
You provide some relevant examples, but they could be more varied and detailed. Additionally, ensure that each example directly supports the point you are making in the paragraph. Aim for a mix of hypothetical and real-world examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, helping to frame your argument effectively.
task response
You have provided a complete response to the task by discussing both views and stating your opinion.
task response
You have made good use of specific examples, particularly in explaining the relevance of studying and working in a country with specific conditions like tropical diseases.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.