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The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar and line charts illustrate the average monthly temperatures and
sales
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 figures for bathing suits in New York City during the initial half of 2012. In summary, the data portrays a positive correlation between temperature and bathing
suit
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sales
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 in the early months of 2012, followed by a notable increase in
sales
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 during the colder months of May and June. Both temperature fluctuations and bathing
suit
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sales
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 in New York exhibited discernible patterns over the six-month period. From January to April, there was a consistent upward trend in both variables. Temperatures gradually rose from approximately 20
°F
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 in January to a peak of around 60
°F
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 in April, mirroring an increase in bathing
suit
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sales
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 from approximately $150,000 to $250,000 during the same period.
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, from May onwards, the trends diverged.
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 temperatures plummeted to around 18
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 in May and approximately 5
°F
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 in June, bathing
suit
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sales
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 spiked to $600,000 and $650,000, respectively.
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 indicates an unexpected surge in demand for bathing suits during the colder months.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, suit, °f with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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