The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given graph depicts the proportion of
housechores
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houses
done
with Verb problem
built
vario
inventions in Correct your spelling
various
United
States between the Correct article usage
the United
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
of
1995 to 1999.In the following paragraphs, I will describe the percentages of machines used in house working.
It is clearly seen that, in 1995 about 60% Change preposition
apply
people
used washing machines for doing laundry which remained constant in 1996 and 1997 but inclined in Change preposition
of people
last
two consecutive Correct article usage
the last
years
. Wheareas
, 40% population used computers in 1995 but Correct your spelling
Whereas
this
trend rise
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rose
nearly
70% in 1999.
Moving Change preposition
to nearly
further
, in first
two Correct article usage
the first
years
only 20% individuals
used mobiles but usage of smartphones Change preposition
of individuals
was
increased in Unnecessary verb
apply
next
four Correct article usage
the next
years
it goes
up to nearly 70%. Wrong verb form
went
On the other hand
, the utilisation of Correct article usage
the internet
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
was seemed
to Change to the active voice
seemed
has seemed
be soared
in these selected Wrong verb form
soar
years
but masses
did not Correct article usage
the masses
gave
much importance to Change the verb form
give
DVD
player in 1996 but Add an article
the DVD
a DVD
was
gradually upward in Unnecessary verb
apply
next
Correct article usage
the next
years
Overall
, it is clear that
usage
of washing machines and computers was showing increasing demand in year 1995 to 1999.The excess of phones and internet Correct article usage
the usage
also
showed inclination while
,
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apply
DVD
player was not gain much popularity.Add an article
the DVD
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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