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The plans below showe the layout of a public library now, and how it will look after development.

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Contained in the diagrams is information pertaining to how a public library will be changed in the future.
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, it can be noted that the right
side
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 of the library will undergo major changes
whereas
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 the remaining
side
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 is likely to be unchanged.
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, it is going to be restricted and a new
area
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 will be added to pay the way for the kid's
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as well as
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 the entrances for staff and kids will
also
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 be constructed. Regarding the main
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 of the library, it can be observed that the place for romance and thriller still remains untouched.
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, the fantasy
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 located beside the restrooms for 2 genders will be relocated to just under them. Notably, the initial entrance is predicted to become the main one. In the suggested blueprint, the mystery books
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 situated in the original
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. Turning to the remaining
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 of the plan, a computer room is newly added in the bottom right-hand corner,
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 the other seating and kid's books
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intentionally above it. On the top right corner, the staff room and the new store will be established near the 2 additional accesses. A final point is that 1 of 2 areas for kid's books has an intention to be moved to the opposite
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 of the new seating.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure that your introduction and conclusion are clear and distinct sections of your essay. Consider adding a concluding sentence that summarizes the main changes and their overall impact.
task achievement
Ensure your ideas are presented clearly to make it easy for the reader to follow along. This can be achieved by using simple and direct sentences and avoiding overly complex phrasing.
coherence cohesion
Work on using a wider range of transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will help the reader follow the progression of your ideas more smoothly.
task achievement
You clearly described the major changes that will occur in the library's layout, which shows a good understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is structured logically, with distinct sections for describing different parts of the library.
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The use of specific examples to describe changes (e.g., moving the fantasy area) helps to clarify your points.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enlarged
  • expanded
  • accessibility
  • ramps
  • elevators
  • technological resources
  • multimedia rooms
  • community-focused
  • meeting rooms
  • study areas
  • eco-friendly
  • sustainable materials
  • green roofs
  • visitor flow
  • congestion
  • redesign
  • facilitate
  • pleasant environment
  • modernity
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