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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graphs illustrate the amount of
time
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 that pupils spend
to learn
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learning
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 in a
vary
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variety
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 of colleges.
Overall
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,it can be observed that all of the reported
students
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 used more
time
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 to
study
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at
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on
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weekdays
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 than
weekends
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at weekends
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. It should
also
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 be noted
how
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that
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 university A student spends most
time
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to do
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doing
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 academic research
in
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on
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 both
weekdays
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 and weekends
whereas
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 the opposite is true for
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the learner
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learner
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learners
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 from college D. Looking at the
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weekdays
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weekday's
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 chart in
further
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 detail, it is evident that
students
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 in school C have the most
study
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time
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 with 10.6
hoursfollowed
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hours followed
hour followed
 by university B and E
students
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which
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apply
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the
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apply
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time
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spend
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spent
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 accounted for 10.1 and 10
hours
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. Under
this
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 level are
students
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 from
college
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colleges
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 A and D only made up for 9.8 and 9.6
hours
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 respectively. Turning to the
weekends
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weekend
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 graph,
it is clear that
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 all of the college
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students
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students'
student's
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time
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 spend to
study
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 reduced in
compare
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comparison
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 to
weekdays
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 where learners from school A have the highest
spend
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spent
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time
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 of only 9
hours
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,
continue
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continued
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 by university B and C
students
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study
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spent
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time
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 only reported for 8.6 and 7.8
hours
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.
Additionally
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, learners from colleges E and D witnessed
at
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apply
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a low of 6.2 and 5.6
hours
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 in order.
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