You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the male and female university graduates in Canada between 1992 to 2007.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the figure for students who graduate from university has dramatically increased. We can see the number of boys who finished their studies fluctuated between 100,000 and 105,000 from 1992 to 2001,
while
the number of men rapidly grew
up
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to 150,000 by 2006. The figure for females is consistently lower than males in these 13 years.In 1992,the number of women who graduated from high
educational
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school stood at only 70,000 and fluctuated between 70,000 and 750,000
in
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over 10 years. The figures began to increase in 2002 and reached around 950,000.
To sum up
,the
numbers
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of women
are
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lower than men in the 12-year period.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • notable
  • graduate numbers
  • gender disparity
  • rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • period
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • significant
  • overview
  • comparison
  • socio-economic
  • educational policies
  • cultural shifts
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