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The table below shows the top ten countries with the largest population in 2019, and how it is projected to change by 2100.

The table below shows the top ten countries with the largest population in 2019, and how it is projected to change by 2100.
The table provides data on the top most populated
countries
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 in 2019, alongside their growth expectation by 2100. Unit is given per
million
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.
Overall
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,
China
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 and India are expected to maintain their top two positions by 2100. Meanwhile, Bangladesh, Russia and Mexico should be replaced by DR Congo, Ethiopia and Tanzania. Focusing on regions predicted to rise in rank, India is to move from the second leading region, starting at 1380
million
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 in 2019 to an addition of 171
million
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 residents by 2100,
hence
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, overthrowing
China
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 and dominating the chat.
Similarly
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, but more significantly, Nigeria is said to jump from the seventh row to the third accounting for 260
million
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 people,
then
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 to 730
million
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.
In contrast
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, looking at the nations that are forecasted to drop in their ranking,
China
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 and Brazil are the only
countries
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 that really dipped in the number of people
china
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 is going to decline greatly from 1439
million
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 to 941
million
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,
although
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 still holding a place
second,
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while
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 Brazil will plunge From 213,000,000 to 177,000,000.
On the contrary
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,
although
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 the USA [331
million
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 to 478
million
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] and Indonesia [274
million
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 to 292
million
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] are to have increments in their population, they are to reduce in position from 3rd to 4th and 5th to 7th respectively. Notwithstanding, the number of people in Pakistan is to rise from 221,000,000 to 360,000,000, still retaining its fifth line. In 2019, Bangladesh [165,000,000], Russia [146,000,000] and Mexico [129,000,000] are highlighted to become the bottom three of the 10
countries
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, and in 2100 they will disappear and
countries
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such
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 as DR Congo will be overpopulated with 296
million
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, Ethiopia [230
million
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] and Tanzania [178,000,000] will take their place.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, million, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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