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The diagrams show the structure of the solar panel and its use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show the structure of the solar panel and its use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the diagrams is information pertaining to the structure and usage of a solar panel.
Overall
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, the whole system is a box including an inlet, outlet and a transparent top made of glasses.
Additionally
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, the solar panel is generally empty inside,
however
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, it can be adjusted to
use
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be used
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 for different purposes involving heating
air
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 and
water
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. Beginning with the process of heating
air
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, it can be seen the
sun
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 rays contribute heat energy to fuel the system. The progress commences when cool
air
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 goes through the inlet to get inside the box. After that, because the temperature in the system has been accumulated to a relatively high degree by sun rays, the cool
air
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 when it gets inside will be heated, resulting in warm
air
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 out from the outlet. Turning to the process of heating
water
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, a
water
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 pipe is necessarily added to the box.
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 to the heating
air
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progress
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process
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, the cool
water
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 in
this
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 procedure goes through the inlet, and
then
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 the
water
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 pipe which is heated by sun rays. The whole process terminates when warm
water
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 gets out from the outlet.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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