The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000
the bar charts illustrate the
propotions
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proportions
proportion
of employees aged 60-64 in four different nations in 1970 and 2000.
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, it can be seen that the employment rates among males were higher than among their female workers , and Japan had the highest figures for both genders in the given years . It is
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noticeable that there was a significant decrease in employment
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among men. Regarding senior male workers , the highest percentage
in1970
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in 1970
was recorded for Japan , at 85%,
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the equivalent figures for Belgium, Australia and the USA were slightly lower , ranging from 73% to 79%. By 2000 , all of these numbers had undergone a dramatic decline, with the figure of Belgium experiencing the most tremendous drop , falling to only 19%. As regards female employees of the same age bracket , Japan
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had the highest employment rate , at 43% , as opposed to only 8%
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Belgium .These percentages
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both declined moderately in 2000 . An opposite pattern was seen in the figures for the USA
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Australia , with the former rising to 39% and the latter growing to 18% in the end .
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