In ancient times, major population thrived in a small communities where everyone knew each other. In these days, most of the people live in urban areas such as capital cities and are not much aware of other people around them. What were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small communities?
Nowadays,
people
prefered
to live in Correct your spelling
prefer
city
in a small Add an article
a city
the city
community
thanChange preposition
in a
a
Correct article usage
the
country side
with knowing everyone in Correct your spelling
countryside
village
, Add an article
the village
therefore
, population
in Add an article
the population
capital
city Add an article
the capital
a capital
always
more than other Add a missing verb
is always
country side
. After Correct your spelling
countryside
less
connections with others and not Change the quantifier
fewer
aware
of other Add a missing verb
being aware
people
will have some impacts and some downsides in this
situation. In this
essay, I will discuss about
what Remove the preposition
apply
upside
is in Correct article usage
the upside
this
phenomenon and what problem
will increase.
In the city, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
people
only contact with
those individuals who had interaction before, Change preposition
apply
for instance
, classmates, co-workers, club-mate and house-mate. These people
who we have known for a period of time, therefore
, they
are the first option to connect with, Correct pronoun usage
apply
however
, hanging out with neighbor
is not Fix the agreement mistake
neighbors
a
easy thing Change the article
an
to
us. Change preposition
for
For example
, you prefer to have a
afternoon tea with friends than in Correct article usage
apply
Correct article usage
a neighbor's
neighbor's
garden Change the spelling
neighbour's
knowing
some new friends. Individual likes to stay in their comfort bubbles staying with those Verb problem
making
people
they liked. It is good on
connection in deep but Change preposition
for
lack
Correct subject-verb agreement
lacks
of
self-awareness. Change preposition
apply
Due to
spending time with people
who have similar character
, logic will stay on same way.
Fix the agreement mistake
characters
However
, this
phenomenon is not a good way to mental health and community
development. For example
, when we have a community
meeting for facilities
improvement, Fix the agreement mistake
facility
due to
lack
of connection, Correct article usage
a lack
therefore
, individuals are
getting hard to understand and accept other Verb problem
find
advises
. Once you Replace the word
advice
refused
other perspectives, you will keep on standing for your thoughts, even Wrong verb form
refuse
others
are Correct word choice
if others
suitable
than yours. Sometimes conflicts can be triggered in Correct quantifier usage
more suitable
meeting
.
Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
To sum up
, staying in a small community
is more dangerous, not only in mental health but also
in development. Be
Wrong verb form
Being
opened
mind and Replace the word
open
have
more connection with others Wrong verb form
having
who
you do not know will be more helpful to Change the pronoun
whom
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
even
to society.Correct word choice
and even
Submitted by d11206 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction should be clearer and more engaging, setting out the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
logical structure
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and logically move from one point to the next, creating a smoother flow.
relevant specific examples
When providing examples, ensure they are specific and directly relevant to the point being discussed.
clear comprehensive ideas
Some sentences are complex and lack clarity. Simplify sentences to express ideas more clearly and comprehensibly.
logical structure
Avoid contradictions and ensure all arguments presented contribute directly to answering the question.
complete response
The essay provides a complete response by addressing both advantages and disadvantages of living in small and urban communities.
relevant specific examples
The essay incorporates relevant examples to support the points being made, though more specificity is needed.