An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their better halves. Do you think that this tendency helps people to socialize or does more harm than good?

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development advanced
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,
people
meet new friends and their
partner
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on dating
softwares
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software
or
apps
. There
lots
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upsides
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be
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seen but
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have
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some danger behind the screen. In
this
essay, I will discuss why
people
addicted
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to those dating
apps
and what danger is coming. Nowadays, individuals enjoy their socialization on
the
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dating
apps
, like
the
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Bumble and
the
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Tinder, which
is
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famous
between
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among
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youth
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young
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and singles. Not like before
smart phone
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smartphone
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showed up, you can talk to
people
who
attracted
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on
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to
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the app
in
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at
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any time, sharing your
informations
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and photos.
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greatest creation
let
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the distance between
people
more
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close
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, without limited time and area, individuals
chatting
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can chat
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in
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at
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any time
you
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they
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want.
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,
this
is just
a
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beginning, since
individual
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an individual
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knows you can say what you want with guiltless, once
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an argument
happened
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in
conversation
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, the only thing have to do is block the person you dislike
then
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talk to
next
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one
who
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you like.
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phenomenon
make
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makes
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people
feel guilty-less and regret-less,
therefore
,
conversation
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conversations
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full
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are full
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of flirting and sex,
the
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and the
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app
become
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becomes
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a tool to hook up
individual
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individuals
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to have sex.
However
, there is a bigger crime
binding
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behind the screen, the scam,
for instance
, some
people
focus on taking nice
photo
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photos
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to hook up those girls by showing off wealth and perfect character. Once a girl bites the bait, they will give
some
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her some
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sweet
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sweets
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then
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ask for financial help. After
couple
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months
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of months
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they will disappear with
girl's
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the girl's
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money. The crime group will keep going on next girl
in
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next week.
That is
the biggest danger in dating
apps
and sites,
due to
you never know how true they are.
To sum
up
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dating sites and
apps
is
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are
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helpful to
people
who
interested
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are interested
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to make
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in making
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some
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new friends and
have
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having
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a partner.
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, if you
fell
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fall
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into
trap
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a trap
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deeper and deeper, you
would
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will
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not be back,
therefore
,
population
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the population
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should be careful and follow your institution. Once you smell something weird, step back and think twice before you make your decision will be good on you.
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task achievement
Ensure to develop each paragraph with enough details to clearly support your main points.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure to enhance the logical flow and improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Proofread for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to ensure clarity.
task achievement
Provide more balanced discussion by highlighting benefits and drawbacks with examples.
coherence cohesion
Use more transition words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas between paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both the socializing benefits and potential dangers of dating apps.
task achievement
Relevant examples, such as mentioning specific apps like Tinder and Bumble, are provided.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, which helps to structure the essay.

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