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The maps below show the development of a seaside village between 1995 and present.

The maps below show the development of a seaside village between 1995 and present.
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The given diagrams illustrate the modernization of a
village
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 along the sea from 1995 to the present.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the green space and agricultural area have been made way for the recreational facilities.
Additionally
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, there are more residences with
car
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a car
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 park next to the hotel. Beginning with the western half of
this
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village
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, where the residential area
have
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has
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 been built more. As for the
northern-west
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northwest
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 of the map, the road had been extended in order to construct new houses. Concurrently, the shop and fish market have been converted into
the
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apply
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restaurant
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restaurants
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as well as
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 apartments for citizens, respectively along the street.
However
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,
although
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 the sea has
been stayed
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stayed
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 the same, the fishing port has been no longer there. Moving onto the eastern
site
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side
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 of the
village
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,
which
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there
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 has
a
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been a
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noticeable change in facilities. Regarding farmland and forest park has been redeveloped into leisure amenities in the northern-east site. Meanwhile, there is a new car park erected
adjacently
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adjacent
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the
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to the
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 hotel
in
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on
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 the southern-east side of the
village
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 despite being no change for the cafe which is opposite that hotel.
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