You recently went on a sightseeing tour which you did not enjoy. Write a letter to the manager of the tour company. In your letter: explain why you chose that particular tour explain what you did not like about the tour suggest two ways in which the tour could be improved

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Dear Mr Weasly. I am writing
this
letter to bring to your
intention
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about
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that
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issues I have found.
that is
about my
experiencing
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immense
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with your tour
company
. I hope you can solve
this
problem before you
loosing
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customer
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customers
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.
Last
week my family and
i
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was go
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went
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to Sembalun for sightseeing, I was happy because the place is my dream. I asked my friend about
the
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better
company
tour for
traveling
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and she
recommanded
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recommended
your
company
.
beside
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the price is low. I was excited before. But when start the
traveling
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i
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I
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feel very
booried
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buried
bored
worried
due to
your employees. we just going to
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and zoo.
whereas
, previously they say we will
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to
ancient
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building. Not only that we
also
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disappointed because we just
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time about 10
jam
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. You should consider
about
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your
company
. if you do not
lossing
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lose
your
customer
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customers
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.
i
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suggest you can solve about the service.
in Addition
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the time
about
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traveling
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travelling
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you have to
improv
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improve
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. thank you for your attention and I hope you can tackle the problem.
Sinceraly
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Sincerely
Nurul
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task achievement
Ensure to use correct punctuation and grammar throughout the letter to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Organize your points logically and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better coherence.
task achievement
You clearly addressed all the aspects required by the task: explaining why you chose the tour, describing what you did not like, and suggesting improvements.
task achievement
You have a courteous and appropriate tone for a complaint letter, which makes your points more compelling.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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