Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skill and imagination than reading. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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activity with a child can
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more skill and imagination than reading. It has some bullet points which
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will discuss in the forthcoming paragraph. Obviously,
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time with a youngster or infant left bright and memorable experiences rather than investigating
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that from
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other resources or books.
Apart from
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, every child is unique and has
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their own
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character with different
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For instance
, many parents with multiple children , frequently raise their
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baby
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from the previous encounter. So, live knowledge has
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role in
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.
On the other hand
,
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from studies about
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has
also
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function in
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up bringing
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. As is well known, that kind of
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often
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accurate
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and
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straight
context, which
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maden
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Task Response
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Response
The essay addresses the topic by comparing enjoyable activities with reading in terms of developing skills and imagination.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a specific point, contributing to a logical structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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