The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation.

The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation.
The maps illustrate a
student
accommodation
prior to and following its redevelopment.
Overall
,the most significant changes at the
student
accommodation
have been the addition of three rooms,a social area, and a car park
while
no modifications have been made to the remaining facilities. Looking at the
student
accommodation
in 2010,it had a garden on either side of the
accommodation
.
According to
the plan,the garden to the north of the
accommodation
has remained the same
while
the garden to the south and to the northwest have been demolished to build a car
parking
Replace the word
park
show examples
and
student
bedroom. The living room,originally positioned in the north area has been replaced by a new
student
bedroom.On arrival,students at the
accommodation
can take advantage of the amenities offered,including
a
Change the article
an
show examples
en-suite room and social area to the south and east of the
accommodation
.
Finally
,despite the extensive renovations,the remaining facilities have remained substantially intact.
Submitted by [email protected] on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words student, accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: