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The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country

The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country
The table gives information about how dairy products were consumed weekly by age group in a European country. The data was measured in
ml
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 for
milk
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, grams for
butter
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 and percentages for full and low fat for different periods of age.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the index of
milk
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 consumption for adults over 65 was more considerable than the same figure for other ages. The number of
people
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 who eat
butter
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 increases dramatically more than others. Looking at the details, the number of the elderly aged over 65 drank 1900
ml
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milk
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 weekly, which contained 30 % full-fat, and 20 % low-fat and
this
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 index showed the leading position in the group. The quantity of
milk
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consumption
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consumed
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of
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by
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 older adults between 26-45 and 45-65 was 1650 and 170
ml
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accordingly
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,
while
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 25 and under 25
people
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 drank
1200ml
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1200 ml
 weekly. The figure for
butter
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of
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for
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 45-65
people
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 was doubled of the same index for
people
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 aged 65 and over 65 (30g). The number of
butter
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 consumption for teenagers aged 25 and under 25 was 12,
while
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this
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 indication grew by 7 for humans aged 26-45.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ml, milk, butter, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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