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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below presents 6 distinctive destinations (Full-time
Work
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, Full-time postgrad study, Part-time
Work
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, Unemployed, Part-time
work
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+postgrad study and Not known) of Anthropology graduate degree students,
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 the table depicts the salaries of 3 types of employment (Freelance consultants, Government Sector and Private Companies) of the alumnus after working for 5 years.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the degree holders who own full-time jobs have the largest proportion,
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, students who do part-time tasks
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 continue their postgrad studies have the least proportion. Meanwhile, half number of the diplomates after working for 5 years can earn 100,000 cabbages in the ministry department.
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, only a small number of graduates gain 25000-49999 dollars as freelance consultants and perform in the authority sections. Looking through the pie chart, it can be noticed that there are 52% of grads own full-time
work
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.
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, only 5% of them keep on doing their postgrad studies and
also
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 doing part-time jobs.
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, 15% of Anthropology professionals
work
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 for a part-time job, followed by 12% of the unemployed. Based on the table, after working for 5 years, half of them can make 100,000 dollars in the government sector. Dramatically, 5% of the alum as freelance consultants and putting their efforts in the regime region only can get 25000-49000 dough.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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