The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000
The two bar charts compare, the proportions of working Australian,Japanese, American and Belgium males and females, who belongs to 60 to 64 age category during the two years 2000 and1970
Overall
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while
more men have worked than women in each country, the Linking Words
Japan
had the highest employment rate for both genders. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, in 1970 more people were engaged in work than 2000.
When looking at the given data, gents from all four countries have showed nearly a equal working rate, which is accounted for just over and just below of three quarter with a maximum of 84% by the Linking Words
Japan
in 1970.
When comparing the year 2000, the Australia and USA witnessed a half percent of adult wagers. Use synonyms
Similarly
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Japan
reported a peak of 76% and the least of one fifth was shown by the Belgium.
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On the other hand
, the ladies from Linking Words
Japan
and USA had a considerable similarity in their percentage in both years, standed 40% and 38% in 2000 when 43% and 36% in 1970. Use synonyms
In addition
, a little less than one fifth percent which was nearly a half than the above regions were evidenced by Australia despite of the little minority of a little under one tenth of unemployment in Belgium females.Linking Words
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